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Since the Hate Crime Statistics Act was established in 1990, the number of hate crimes reported has consistently ranged around 7,500 or more annually. According to a new study by the Leadership Conference on Civil Rights Education Fund, this approximates to nearly one every hour of every day. Therefore, it seems that for every hate crime that is occurring, there is another one being plotted. Some feel that hate crime legislation will inhibit free speech, while others believe that establishment of stronger hate crime legislation will, more importantly, decrease crime rate. Hate Crimes target people of different race, religion, gender, sexual orientation (most recently changed to also include the transgender community) and even those who exhibit a disability. These crimes range from name calling and vandalizing, to murder. As a witness of such crimes, I strongly attest to the establishment of more improved hate crimes laws. Such crimes can occur at anytime, and any place, such as college campuses. So, there is no reason why students who are there to gain an education should be fearful that such crimes could so easily be committed against them just because of who they are. It is more worthy to have our freedoms limited to increase the safety of our country, which is in the hands of our government.



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According to a new study by the Leadership Conference on Civil Rights Education Fund , the number of hate crimes reported has consistently ranged around 7,500 or more annually approximating to nearly one every hour of every day, since the Hate Crime Statistics Act was established in 1990. By this statement, it seems that for every hate crime that is occurring, there is another one being plotted. Some feel that hate crime legislation will inhibit free speech, while others believe that establishment of stronger hate crime legislation will, more importantly, decrease crime rate. As a witness of such crimes that target people of different race, religion, gender, sexual orientation (most recently changed to also include the transgender community) or even those who exhibit a disability, and range from name calling and vandalizing, to murder, I strongly attest to the establishment of more improved hate crimes laws. These crimes can occur at anytime, and any place, such as college campuses. So, there is no reason why students who are there to an education should be fearful that such crimes can so easily be committed against them just because of who they are. It is more worth to have our freedoms limited to increase the safety of our country, which is in the hands of our government.

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http://www.nytimes.com/2009/10/09/us/politics/09hate.html
http://www.nytimes.com/2009/10/23/us/politics/23hate.html


http://www.cbsnews.com/blogs/2009/10/13/politics/politicalhotsheet/entry5381671.shtml